Business card comments wanted

[Vandelete]

Hey Scrub ..good job making that Buisines card..i really like it. but i must say too..leave the Gothic font behind and choose one who will fit in like the font wich Aiken detaling was made with..but the rest speaks for itself.

[scrub]

New card draft

Here's my next draft. Thanks again for the comments. I tried to fit them all in. I'm still having problems with the web and email on the bottom with the tag line. Maybe I need to drop the tag line from the card.

Ideas?? Thanks.

[gb387]

Hey scrub nice work! I like that one better one more small thing the word "SHINE" and your email seem to run together a little. If there was a way to separate them more? hummm.... maybe its just me.

I think its much more fine tuned than the first one nice work!

[scrub]

Thanks again. Yeah I'm still trying to work out the spacing.

[SpoiledMan]

Rick, how about making the email on one line and your tag line one line? Otherwise, I like!

[scrub]

Great idea. I think it works well. Thanks for the help. What do you think?

[SingingSabre]

I think it looks great now!

Perhaps you should space the motto a little more evenly?

[black240sx]

I'm not sure that the underlining is adding anything to your motto. Try leaving it out.

[SpoiledMan]

Much better. I do agree with the above posters in saying that the motto should be spaced as a single statement and maybe lose the underscoring. Play around with it and see what happens.

[scrub]

I guess the tag line wasn't working. Here's what I was going for.

1. The reason for the underscoring was to visually show what I offer my clients. The "what's in it for me" that a business has to answer for clients to get their business. So I underscored "Your Car to show the client what they would be getting. Their car cleaned. I underscored the "Our time" to show the client their car was getting cleaned by us and saving them time. This to me is creating value for my client's. Value in terms of money yes, but also value in something more important, their Time.

2. I spaced out the tag line and was going to add puncuation to the first part but space was running out and starting to look bunched.

Again thanks for the good ideas and comments. Please don't read the above as an argument. I'm giving you my reasoning behind the tag line. Tell me if it makes sense or did I go off the deep end on that!!

Here's the updated card. I think I've added everyones comments, which were some very valuable comments and ideas. Keep the comments coming, please! I think we're getting close to print!

[SpoiledMan]

Now I didn't say you had to take the underscore away just to play with it. Center the tag line and you're ready for the print button.

[ftboomer]

I like the changes, looks great now.

[SingingSabre]

Originally posted by SpoiledMan
Now I didn't say you had to take the underscore away just to play with it. Center the tag line and you're ready for the print button.

[black240sx]

If you look closely, there is a swirl mark on the right fender of the car.

lol, just kidding. The card looks great.

[scrub]

Originally posted by black240sx
If you look closely, there is a swirl mark on the right fender of the car.

lol, just kidding. The card looks great.

That'll buff right out. Or I can photoshop it out. That's a good one!